It's so sad that he takes every single sentence to try to be overly elaborate to demonstrate how good of a writer he is when he's not a good one at all.
I play jazz and there's a saying about soloing that "you don't try to cram in as many notes as possible. Your silences are as, if not more important than your sounds."
Patso is throwing every note possible in there when he can't even play Hot Cross Buns.
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1 ellencakehorn 2019-09-11
When you try to write a sexy scene and end up describing a fart.
1 SuperToes845 2019-09-11
Pat writes about what he knows.
1 Magicmetalknight 2019-09-11
What’s with the “she” and “her” hate speech
1 Twatsmash 2019-09-11
I’m literally shaking!
1 HARVEST_AREA 2019-09-11
"He smelled of musk, but not in a disagreeable way. He was also young."
Jesus, sounds like this corpulent queer would love one of Bryan Singer's parties.
1 Doc_McCoyXYZ 2019-09-11
Isn’t a musk another word for smell? He smelled like a smell?
1 Single_Action_Army 2019-09-11
Her smell is intoxicating
1 Bigsmooth4 2019-09-11
This is written by a gay man
1 Mintwa 2019-09-11
Calling her First Lastname is not just lazy but makes your brain short circuit reading it.
1 NickApleas 2019-09-11
And it's a rip off of Idiocracy's Not Sure gag.
1 2th_repair 2019-09-11
I think it predates that. I think he’s straight up ripping off Snow Crash’s “Hiro Protagonist” and “Yours Truly”
1 OnArefugee 2019-09-11
He writes fantasy so he has an excuse why the characters don't think or talk like people.
1 PringlesCanJonathan 2019-09-11
Distractingly awkward dialogue has been a part of Thruxxton society for generations, child.
1 fatprick_s_tomlinson 2019-09-11
His writing style is so fucking lame. He really writes like a fat woman.
1 Doc_McCoyXYZ 2019-09-11
Eats like one, too.
1 Senior_Poster 2019-09-11
He thinks he is witty by writing things like "the changeling incident". Nice world-building you fat-faced faggot.
1 Single_Action_Army 2019-09-11
It's so sad that he takes every single sentence to try to be overly elaborate to demonstrate how good of a writer he is when he's not a good one at all.
I play jazz and there's a saying about soloing that "you don't try to cram in as many notes as possible. Your silences are as, if not more important than your sounds."
Patso is throwing every note possible in there when he can't even play Hot Cross Buns.
1 OutlawMemer 2019-09-11
There's a lesson Fatrick desperately needs to learn.
1 PringlesCanJonathan 2019-09-11
Everything he writes has to be either clever/witty or badass/epic. It comes off like the writing of an 8th grader who takes himself way too seriously.
1 Sergeant_Joseph_Spud 2019-09-11
He’s a faaaaag
1 MKUltraGameShow 2019-09-11
This is objectively awful. If I was his editor, I wouldn't even know where to start. Perhaps the fireplace and a glass of scotch.